tgirly

Interesting; I like the format of the story; almost like a poem, but it's a novel. Kinda unique. The song is an itch unrealistic. I'm sure it would be a ...

You communicated the emotion of the girl really well through the poem; how, after five years, she still feels guilty over the two tests. Amazing, simply amazing!

Definitely intriguing. You've got a pretty good beginning here. There are just a few quick problems I'd like to address: You should consider a different first sentence. I get that ...

The last lines of the second stanza and the last stanza are the only ones that don't really go with the rhythm of the poem, so that's pretty good. Some ...

I'm going to get into the nitty gritty now before I forget anything. I'm a bit confused on why the age of the teachers matter so much to the main ...

I LOVE it, Rylee-Wa! You rock at descriptions; I can almost see it all in my head. Usually, I find written-out lyrics very repetitive. Yours are not. There's a kind ...

Nice song. I like the feeling behind it. There are just a few things I noticed that didn't exactly work. Firstly, the chorus was a bit repetitive. I don't know ...

Wow. I love this poem. "She denied the imperfection persistant in keeping things the same" I'm not sure these lines have the same metre as the rest of the poem. ...

Wow. Very dramatic. It's just oozing with emotion. I love the metaphor. I'm not sure the title really fits with the poem; the title makes me think it's going to ...

This is a bit sick. Actually really sick. I think it's interesting that normally, when people do something truly horrible, their names are remembered in infamy, but this Jane's name ...

Yay! You got the next chapter up! I love the abruptness of Demitri killing something. It brings both the both the reader and the main character up to speed on ...

Hiya, I'm going to review this. The poem seems a bit disjointed and I'm having trouble figuring out what the first part has to do with the second. No one ...

Welcome to YWS! If you ever have any questions about anything from the technicalities of the sight to wanting something reviewed, just PM me. The scene where she finds the ...

This prologue has a lot of suspense and you have me very intrigued. I really hope you continue it, and when you get the next chapter out PM me so ...

This is amazing. The language at the beginning is so beautiful and captivating, and then the humor at the end is so unexpected (in a good way) and the voice ...