tgirly

You use the word 'enchanted' twice in the first stanza. I don't know if it's supposed to be some sort of repetition, but it feels too random to be, so ...

I'll be sure to listen to this later, but for now you'll have to do with a review of just the lyrics themselves. I really love this. The word choice ...

This is the sweetest poem I'll ever read. Certainly the most feeling behind all the poems I've read today. It's short and simple and sweet and I love it. It ...

This poem's so similar in style and content to Rodeo, it could almost be Rodeo II. I'd suggest making the two a sort of couplet somehow? I'm not sure if ...

I'm not sure if we're God's muses, since that would imply He was inspired by us, but that was the only line that seemed a bit off to me in ...

Wow, this is great. The flow is nice, but for some reason "I hang onto the phone" feels too wordy, so i'd suggest shortening that line a bit. I love ...

This was awesome. I love the use of the parentheses and how the meaning of the poem isn't painfully obvious, especially at the beginning. I'm not sure about the line ...

It's a book I'd consider reading, so you've accomplished the job of a summary. The one thing I'd be worried about, if I were writing this book myself, is keeping ...

This is a short, dark, and funny poem and I like it. I love the wolf's personality, how he's very blunt and factual about the tale he has to tell. ...

The lines in the first two stanzas feel two long, like each line could easily broken up in thirds. I'm not saying you should, but I would recommend it. There's ...

You long FOR the dreams of children, not to them. (Sorry to begin with such a nitpicky thing.) You don't need to capitalize the first word of every line. You ...

I love the writing style; there's something dark about it; almost slightly cynical, maybe? I applaud you for sticking to your rhyme scheme. It added a new level to the ...

This was an amazing poem. Wonderful imagery, sharp humor, and a deep message. My favorite lines was "Devilish she-twins". You could use some more punctuation, especially in the first half, ...

Velvetleaf: "the curdled mud and derogatory petals" I believe that this line is a beat too long. Maybe find a shorter word for derogatory? I do like this poem; I ...

I kind of love this poem. I love the theme of the poem; I've always hated it when people say stuff like that. I understand your frustration, when you care ...