stupidiot92

I liked this poem. I like the ideals behind it. Also as a poem it had nice rhythm, but not much rhyme. However, i don't think you really need rhyme ...

This was ANOTHER good poem. I like how you have us feek what he/she is feeling and that he/she doesn't want to kill but has to. Anyway keep this up ...

Once again another good peom by claudette. Rhme and Rhythm were good as is the description(i'm not a perv i was stating the way she described it not what she ...

Interesting twist there at the end. I thought it was just going to be a poem about sex, but instead it was between brother and sister. hmm...

Good luck on the publishing thing. This piece was awesome, as usual. Though i think when you have Jamiy explain the whole dance thing, i think that you should also ...

I liked this pices as well. All your pieces are amazing. It seems that Jamiy is gay probably because of Chris. However, he seems to like Sappy. Either as a ...

This was a bit short. It lacked detail. I would suggest adding more actions and emotions into it.

Did you chanfe the title of your book or did you just not post chapter 1?

I liked it even though it really wasn't poetry form. Life goes out. Life comes in. i think these can be on the same line.

Here it is slightly edited. The Most Beautiful Eyes As I walked a lonely path, I ran into an eye catching girl. Not just another girl. This girl had the ...

I liked this poem. It has better rhyming than mine and it has a rhythm to it. I may take a closer look at it later and critique it more.

Quote: Sounds crap sounds like crap This was a good part. I like how you explain a thing from the past that made Sappy's mom freak out.

The end seems abrupt. You should add more detail to the actions of the father. Also you have no mention of Clarice and him fighting anywhere so it seemed abrupt ...

WOW! That is an amazing poem. I loved it i am going to make a copy and post it on my door and put it in all my binders. I ...

I liked the poem. Even though there was no rhyme it still flowed. The way you put a lot of detail on this poem was good because it is a ...