shiney1

This is a good first entry. It as good descriptive language, and you will see that you will get better as time goes on. Also, poems do not have to ...

Good poem. There seems to be many of these Gothic-like dark poems popping up more and more with things like Twilight becoming the "in" thing. I can feel the despair ...

Thank the Lord that I am not the only one who sees what is happening to our world. Very good, insightful poem! It flows well, and clearly conveys the main ...

Lovely poem. It emanates the feeling of peace and tranquility, and very nice description. Winter does seem to be a favorite season for meditation *laugh*. Very nice, no real revision ...

This is a really good poem for a ten-year-old! I would like to see what you can do now. TheTruthLiesWithin pretty much summed up the grammatical things. And call me ...

Poems do not have to rhyme, and this is pretty nice. But I think that it does not really "feel" like a poem because of the flow. Poems need to ...

Wow. Very good imagery, very descriptive. I can picture the flower opening up at night and closing in the morning in slow-mow *laugh*. And the whole poem flows so well. ...

Oh my, now I feel so sad, because I am a horse lover. Is this a true story? No-wait, do not answer. Maybe because I like horses is why I ...

Overall, pretty good poem! It seems like one of those poems that leaves a lot of things to the reader's imagination, which is good, for a poem is not a ...

Oh yes, another one of those dark pieces that are getting more abundant as time goes on. The poem has good feeling in it, a tiny bit of suspense, but ...

Very nice! This poem has a lot of feeling, and you can feel yourself thinking about when anything like this has happened to you. It gives you what is needed ...

I've never heard a death poem told this way before. I see what you are trying to convey. TheTruthLiesWithin summed up all of the "physical" needs that the poem had. ...

Very nice poem! It is catchy, and fun to read fast, so the sounds blend together. And very good tone. I think the ending is cute, and it stops you ...

Very nice story! Have not heard one like it before. I usually do not read such long stories, but when I saw it was about horses, I just could not ...

Nice! short and sweet, and it makes you think. Though, i think that if you expanded on it, it could be a little deeper, and would give the reader more ...