Moonflower

Aww, a lovely poem. Really sweet, simple and really enjoyable to read. Just as a poem should be. Keep on writing this gorgeous work,

~Crimsona

Lovely. It was a good story and a poem. There isnt much to correct it was well put.

Like everyone else has said, superb use of imagery. No suggestions on my part, the rhythm and flow of the poem was amazing.!

TheTruthLiesWithin wrote:

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Moonflowers are my new obsession.. it's just a little something on their blooming

Hanging lifeless to the ground, ( I did not really understand this line. )
You had woken up so gently.
You bloomed under the ivory moonlight,
And spiraled up, in all your glory. ( Beautiful =D )

You lie under the winking lights,
And dance in the ruffling breeze.
Light, in the swallowing darkness,
You shine through with ease.

The pink sunrise will draw nearer,
You will crumple up under its weight.
The beautiful night will fold on you,
For the return of the moon, you will await.

I enjoyed this poem due to the vivid imagery and the flow of the piece. I can sit and imagine this flower that seem to sit in the moonlight. Absolutely beautiful

Very Nice poem. I love it!
Nice imagery.

I really liked this poem (: The detail and the flow of the poem is great ! I love reading your posts.
Keep writing!

-Forever alone.*

Wow. Very good imagery, very descriptive. I can picture the flower opening up at night and closing in the morning in slow-mow *laugh*. And the whole poem flows so well. Haven't I reviewed something of yours before? As stated above, there seems to be no real corrections needed here. Very nice!

Beautiful. I love this. Your imagery is fantastic and I don't think there's anything I think I need to correct. Great work.

P.S: I like moonflowers too.