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  • Poetry » Dramatic, Culture Re: Body and Soul: A Spoken Word

    This was a very interesting piece! I tried to draw my eyes from it but found I could not stop reading! The first little nitpick I found was the repetitive ...

    Oct 17, 2014
  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, Historical Fiction Re: Sofia and the Descendants

    Hello, I am here for a review :) These are all of the nitpicks I found (and please note that I am VE-EH-RY picky :P!) " "Thanks[,]" I muttered as ...

    Oct 9, 2014
  • Novel / Chapter » Realistic, Teen Fiction Re: The Boy, Delaney: Prologue

    Hello, I'm sbf1102, here for a review :) First of all, I loved the beginning of the story; the setting and characters in this prologue are described wonderfully. I particularly ...

    Oct 7, 2014
  • Poetry » Literature, Realistic Re: Mexican Fall

    " [ The ] car sounds like a skateboard and [ ] is crunching the leaves and crunching itself [ T ]hat's just what I hear [ , ] though ...

    Oct 6, 2014
  • Short Story » General, Action / Adventure Re: Nightmare

    This was really entertaining! ( :-) ) "Start You wake up in a bed [ , ] but it's not your bed. You have no idea where you are [ ...

    Oct 6, 2014
  • Poetry » General, Narrative Re: My First Spoken Word Poem (To my Father)

    Wow. Let me just say, I've had only a partial share of the trouble you've gone through in your life, and I'm sure you, like me, do NOT at ALL ...

    Oct 5, 2014
  • Short Story » General, Narrative Re: The Seniors

    This sounds really awesome. :) I like the suspense, the fond storytelling, and althought most graduation stories seem quite cliché, I'm excited for yours ( did I spell cliché right? ...

    Oct 5, 2014
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Scratch, Click

    Omgg! I loved this poem!

    Oct 4, 2014
  • Poetry » Romantic, Narrative Re: The Schoolgirl's Analysis

    Nice poem! Here's a few tips: "Whenever I look up to glance at him, I suck in my breath, my heart leaps to my mouth, I get butterflies in my ...

    Oct 4, 2014
  • Script » Humor, General Re: Talk Show With a Cat

    OMG I AM LAUGHING MY HEAD OFF! Okay, the first nitpick I found was this: "Where the new aspiring , beautiful, and talented new talk show host of the decade ...

    Oct 3, 2014
  • Poetry » Romantic, Dramatic Re: Citadel

    Really awesome! I loved the flow in your poem. Very free - style --- a PERFECT beginning to your poem - writing career! One thing though: I would add a ...

    Oct 3, 2014
  • Short Story » Teen Fiction, Science Fiction Re: t5

    Really cool story! So, I did find a few nitpicks almost immediately into the story. :( " I can't even be called a girl, I think. More like a scientific ...

    Oct 3, 2014
  • Poetry » General, General Re: excavitat

    This is amazing!! :o I am in awe of your surpeme SORRY I'M A SUCKY TERRIBLE SPELLER XD surpreme UGH supreme. There I got it! Lol :P. Anyway I respect ...

    Oct 2, 2014
  • Poetry » Lyrical, Realistic Re: The Edge of Death

    As stated before, as diminuitive as its size is, the poem truly IS read better at a slower pace. You drew sooo much emotion out of the readers without using ...

    Oct 2, 2014
  • Poetry » Other, Romantic Re: Just Another Fall Night

    Great poem! I really enjoyed your rhyming flow. I found a very minuscule amount of nitpicks in this excellent piece. In the following statement: "My love by my side, there's ...

    Oct 2, 2014


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