rubberduck

Hey there! Just a quick review. You dream at school as a way to escape As a way to pass time Wishing to take on a new shape I thought ...

Hi there. First of all, lovely poem. I enjoyed reading it. However, perhaps you could work on your paragraphing? It could just be me, but with your poem in a ...

Hey there! First of all, your dad wrote a really nice poem. I'd like to point out the two stanzas that I particularly liked. Woe to you oh wanton fool ...

Hi! I got a mental image of a woman holding onto a lifeless body of a man at the railway tracks. That's how my brain pieced your poem together, anyway. ...

Hey there! When I stumbled upon this piece, I thought it'd be quite long and draggy, but it wasn't. Alright, critique time. I asked to a movie. I asked you ...

Hey there! Just thought I'd pop by to give you a review. :) If I fall in love what about my heart, what are the chances of it breaking? Comma ...

Hey there, nice poem. :) It was generally good, but I'll nitpick. Time to seal away this book of stones. Of old memories, & Unforgettable times. Don't capitalize 'u' for ...

Hey there. First of all, I'd like to say that this is the first piece I've read since stepping back into YWS today after months. And it's good. :) So, ...

Hey there. This is a really good poem. I liked how you described the shadows' movements. There was good description and the scenes I imagined were pretty vivid thanks to ...

Hey there, twin! I enjoyed reading this piece. :) It had a nice flow. There's a slight mistake though. I really like this piece. Especially your varying of structure in ...

Hello! I've looked through your piece twice, but there don't seem to be any mistakes that I can point out. Good job with this piece by the way. I thoroughly ...

Hi there. Welcome to YWS. :) For your first poem, this is good. Alright, I'm gonna point out the few mistakes I found. And when you look at me what ...

Heylo. Welcome to YWS! I hope you're enjoying yourself on this site. If you have any questions, feel free to ask anyone here. This site's full of great people. :) ...

Wow. Hi there. This piece was really good. It seems more like a short story to me though. I don't see how you can continue it unless the story's about ...

Hey there! Well, as the others have already said.. Continue! :) It was very.. short (and sweet). Heh. Anyway, please continue writing this. It's kinda killing me since I want ...