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Re: Cheddar's Cheeseria Pt 1.
hey there! chikara pointed out a few grammatical errors in here, so I will focus on the overall storyline. I have to say I was not expecting that ending! It ...
Jun 15, 2021 -
Re: A Crash
Hey there! I saw you mentioned this was a dream you had, so that cleared some things up for me! The story was abrupt, vague, and confusing, similar to a ...
Jan 8, 2021 -
Re: Unknown Powers
Hello & Happy New Year! I'm not the biggest fan of fantasy, but I enjoyed reading through most of this. What initially caught my interest was the narrator having long, ...
Jan 1, 2021 -
Re: Chapter Two, Capture the Night
Hey there! I hope you're doing well. I didn't want to jump into chapter 2 without any context, so I quickly read your first chapter. My first impression was that ...
Dec 27, 2020 -
Re: Learning to Live
Hi mckinley, Welcome to YWS! I know I'm a little late, but I hope you'll forgive me. Overall, I think this was structured nicely. The narrator felt hopeless and lost ...
Dec 10, 2020 -
Re: what a time..._day 2
Hey there :] So this almost felt like a philosophical read. The writer of this entry is obviously not a shallow individual but a perceptive one. I did go back ...
Aug 23, 2019 -
Re: Dark, fire( The pictures are from pexels.com)
Hey, hey, how's it going? It's pretty rare to see actual pictures in the Green Room, which may or may not be why I dropped in. :p They're lovely pictures, ...
Apr 18, 2019 -
Re: The Prophecy Revealed Chp. 1.1 REWRITE
Hey, Honora! Okay, okay, I really like this. I'm not a fan of fantasy tales or anything similar to them, but for some reason, I'm getting Shannon Hale vibes while ...
Apr 8, 2019 -
Re: Multi chapter 2
Hey fantascifi66! Hope you're doing well. :D I read the first chapter of this novel, so I have a bit of a background. It seems like quite an interesting story. ...
Mar 8, 2019 -
Re: Sleeping Beauty, awake: oh no
Hi Blou. :] I like your style of writing here - it's the first thing I noticed as I was reading. You're not simplistic but you're not complicated. You have ...
Feb 25, 2019 -
Re: A Bright Idea
Hi there! I hope you're doing well. This was certainly a cute little story, and while I kind of want to critique it, I also like it how it is. ...
Feb 22, 2019 -
Re: Peace and Peaches - Chapter 2
Hey, EternalRain! :D I've been seeing this hanging out in the GR for a while, so I thought I'd swoop in and give it a review. :p Not that there ...
Jan 30, 2019 -
Re: In Which My 3 Fave Avengers Go Shopping: A Script
I saw Avengers in the title and freaked. No lie. Marvel is the best . So, naturally, I had to slide in for a review. ;p First off, first off: ...
Jan 18, 2019 -
Re: Non-Fiction or Fiction?
Hey there, Liberty! :D I hope you're doing well today, and I hope those Fairy Dairy entries are moving along smoothly. ;) I saw you had this story sitting in ...
Jan 16, 2019 -
Re: A New Ally - The Creature Inside Chapter 3
Hey, bigsisfarmer! :D I reviewed the chapter previous to this one, though I'm not sure if you remember me. Either way, I'll jump right in. Specifics: No guards were in ...
Jan 15, 2019
