Author's Note: This is just a fun story I thought I'd post. Half of this is real, and it actually happened to me. And half of this is fake. Enjoy!
I'm sitting on my parents' bed reading a fictional book called: Tuesday in the Castle. Papa is on his chair studying on his wooden study table making a PowerPoint presentation for work. Papa turns his chair so he faces me. I didn't notice until he said:
"Dear, what are you reading?"
"Tuesday in the Castle by Jessica Day George." I reply. Saying the authors name with the title of the book is a habit of mine.
"What's it about?" he asks, even though he knows what's coming.
"It's about five people who live in a magical castle that adds new rooms every Tuesday," I say as he nods along. "But then, an evil wizard-" he stops me at "wizard".
"You know, when I was your age I-" he starts.
"-would read many non-fictional books." I finish for him. This sentence has been repeated by him every single time I read a fictional book.
"Have you ever tried to read any educational or non-fictional books?" he questions me.
"PAPA!! Mama made juice!!" my little sister bursts into the room and hands both of us a cup of red juice.
"What's in it?" I ask.
"Apple, carrots and some weird looking red fruits." my sister replies smoothly. I cringe at the sound of carrots and 'some weird looking red fruits', every thing else was fine, though.
Papa is already done with his juice. Woah! That was SUPER fast! Once my sister leaves the room, Papa asks me to remind him what we were talking about.
"You asked me if I ever tried to read educational or non-fictional books." I say.
"Have you?"
"No."
"Why?"
"Because the last time I read them, I fell asleep on the first page."
"So that's good!" Papa exclaims.
I look at him, stunned. "How is that GOOD?"
"Since you don't sleep much, you could read a non-fictional book right there and then! That way, you'll have a longer sleep!" he says, proud of his prediction.
"You have a point." I mumble.
(I guess non-fiction wins!)
Hello Libby! Jade here to leave you a quick review. I loved this short little book, it had a good, unique hook to it. I love fiction, and I believe it is 100 times better. I loved this short story, it's simple, sweet, and has a nice little concept. There were a few grammatical errors, but everyone has pointed them out. I loved it!
This was a very interesting piece to read! If you ask me I would say non-fiction only because I like reading about things that is real but I do read some fiction books. "Saying the author's name with the title of the book is a habit of mine." I thought this line didn't really need to be added you could just say the name of the book and the author and just move on to the next line.
There were also a few commas that didn't need to be added that were there. And make sure that you keep the tense of the story the same throughout the story. Nice work and I am looking forward to reviewing more of your work.
Hi!
This is a good story, very relatable. I read a variety of genres, but most of them fall under the category of fiction, so I totally agree. 
Now for the review part:
I only have two nitpicks, but otherwise, the story is good.
"Apple, carrots and some weird looking red fruits." my sister replies smoothly. I cringe at the sound of carrots and 'some weird looking red fruits', every thing else was fine, though.
). So congrats on that!liberty500
Hi I am Ishan212 and I am here to review your work.
Well cool story ... fiction non fiction.
You ask me fiction wins, if inspired by reality.
Great Work!!!
Keep Writing!!!
Ishan212
Hi, Liberty500.
I really like the topic that you wrote about; I've always wondered how a discussion between which is better would go. I enjoyed the simplicity of this story, but I kind of just wanted a little more, because I didn't feel the title was addressed that much.
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Me and my dad are both work addicts.
"No,"
"Because the last time I read them, I fell asleep on the first page."
Hey there, Liberty!
I hope you're doing well today, and I hope those Fairy Dairy entries are moving along smoothly. 
I saw you had this story sitting in the Green Room, so I thought I'd drop in and review. Let's get to it, then, shall we?
Specifics
My dad, who I call Papa, is on his chair studying on his wooden study table making a PowerPoint presentation for work.
Me and my dad are both work addicts.
Papa is already done with his juice. Woah! That was SUPER fast!
"Because the last time I read them, I fell asleep on the first page."
Hi there!
This is definitely a good story! I sorry, but this won't be much of a review. The two things I'm going to point out are just nitpicks, really. Feel free to ignore them! Okay, the first one is when you are talking about your dad at the desk. You say he is working on his desk. There is nothing wrong with that, it's just that in some cases, it could make the reader think he is literally "on" his desk. Like on top of it. .
Second:
"Papa is already done his juice." All you need to do with this sentence is put in the word "with" between "done" and "his."
Also, I love Jessica day George! Have you read Princess of the midnight ball? I've read that one and Princess of the silver wood. They are really, really good! The first is my favorite though.
Haha, I really liked this, it seems like something my dad would say to me. Keep up the good work!
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