restlessheart14

Thanks so much for the review :) I'm sure I will take you up on the advice offer...Also I actually had her surname italicised but the copy and pasting didn't ...

I really appreciate you reading all 3 parts and the reviews on each :) I'm very excited about this story and appreciate all of the advice! Thank you

Hey thanks so much for the review! I'll be sure to try to keep your suggestions in mind. Also reading the first and second parts may help explain her wing ...

Hi there :) Restlessheart here, I think this piece is pretty profound from the get go, I think it is an interesting concept... Although I'm not sure where you would ...

Thanks for the review! I was going for the uses of alliteration and consonance for the rhythm and the two lines that rhymed were intentional there at the end. :)

thanks so much i was also unsure of the number of times i repeated it and will probably change it in the future maybe with your suggestion :)

Thanks so much! That really helped ill be sure to correct those things and work on her personality in the future :)

Thanks for the review! I'll be posting more parts in the future! Also the protagonist is a girl :P

Thanks so much Kaila :)

Hey i enjoyed your take on depression, but i feel as though you could have gone a bit deeper with it. The pain you wrote about seemed only so deep ...

Hey there restlessheart14 here, i really liked your piece. You had a lot of great imagery and analogies people could probably connect with. However during the work i did get ...

hey I just wanted to let you know this story sounds amazing and has great potential to be a fantasy thriller. Just out for repeating words such as 'stated' and ...

Thank you for pointing those things out! I will be sure to fix that!

Thanks so much!

Haha hey I'm sorry for all the grammatical errors its one of the problems I have. I also wrote this when I was on vacation so I copied and pasted ...