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As Madam experienced, I find myself getting into the story. I only wished there was more sentence structure variety -and description. What does our protagonist look like? Does he look ...

Each day seemed like the last, get up, shower, get dressed, and go to hell. Josh’s body was getting so sick and tired of this monotonous routine. He hated being ...

Those dragons cracked me up! I haven’t read previous chapters so some of my comments may be invalid. I was a bit lost with characters, but that's to be expected. ...

Selina obeyed, feeling her belly put out and in with each breath. I don’t believe a stomach can physically put out –pull in, I can see. A more adequate word ...

Hello, there! That was a bit awkward just now, the dialogue in the beginning. As Stella noted, that was a bit weird. I still can’t tell whether Bob or Beck ...

This being my first time reading, some of the points I make may not be valid. “Camellia is an air bender, she cleans it up. I don’t think she approves ...

Great job, I really grew fond of Lane and his adorkable nature. Honest. It's been awhile since I could wholeheartedly like a character for being weird and a general oddball. ...

I applaud you for taking on the ever-difficult first person point of view. I understand the challenge of writing in first person: however, would've liked to see more sentence structure ...

The story seems to focus around Kym (the protagonist), John (the possible love interest), and Rahm (evil man representing to the oppressive government). The three friends seem superfluous: Hannah, Ste

Whoa, what just happened? Ray was in a room with a strange man offering to fulfill her wish and suddenly, there’s a war! I’ve been reading since Chapter 5 –how ...

No references made to dead friend Molly. It hurts my soul. I don't know why, but I've become emotionally invested in this dead character and the fact their death is ...

I haven't kept up with the series besides the previous chapter. I went to the next chapter thinking we're going to see the protagonist's take on Molly's murder. Perhaps delve ...

I see plenty of potential here. A young protagonist becomes the head of the household in turbulent times –times of war, of genocide, or perhaps of the end of the ...

I agree with much of what previous reviewers have said: describing blood as goo wasn't doing it for me (Kyllorac) or how the doctor lost his license (I know understand ...

This is an interesting bit, here mate. Sadly, I haven't read the chapters preceding this one thus I might be off with some of my comments. I tried my best ...