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Hey! Great Topic And A Great Theme. I Really like the poem though there are some minor mistakes. The lines "A promise that wasn’t kept, A soul that wept," Were ...

In these lines "I just notice, in time that parts of us flake off like snow in early winter" I think you should add a comma or a semi colon ...

Great efforts but frankly speaking this poem needs a lot of improvements. These lines seemed very very weird and unusual 'lower, lower. It gets so low, so low, so low. ...

Hey Great Efforts . Good Writing Style. Now coming to the negative traits--- This Paragraph Describes The Baby Doesn't It? 'The creature slept. Breath after breath its tiny chest rose ...

Hey! Great Poem There. Seems you have got talent. Dreams a great topic. A lot of things do come to mind while talking about dreams. Don't they? I really liked ...

I like the lines 'Hindered by hungry heat, take heed; Who's your ally? Who's your rival? Who stands in the way of your survival?' And 'In frenzied dance of hit-and-run ...

Hey Great efforts . First of all while reading this it seemed as though one was reading a complete paragraph with a bit of editing here and there. Make it ...

Okay RBT here to review, A really nice poem and a great hard work you have put here it seems. Now coming to the negative traits. In the first stanza ...

Great usage of words. I like the way you used the words withered,mischance and genealogy. First of all I congrat anyone. So here goes for you too. GREATT EFFORT. Though ...

Hey! Great efforts! A looooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooong poem I must say. Though there are a few mistakes you need to correct. Why dont you revise your poem and check for errors. A ...

Hey! This seemed funny. I actually laughed reading this. This was something new and interesting on young writers society. A great idea. Yeah this is not a poem or something ...

Hey! First of all great effort. When I was going through the list of poems for reviewing. I saw this piece and the title really lured me in. The description ...

Hey! first of all great efforts. The lines "as you said so Buried in the peaceful grave," I could not keep up with the poem. I do not think this ...

"been declined thirty-seven times and counting. Your only fan is your mother, who’s getting tired of you taking up the living room" "No one in their right mind would ever ...

Okay first of all basically I praise them for there work. So here goes for you too. Great Work!! Now coming to the negative points I found some lines rhyming ...