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Thanks for the review. This is actually my first poem. I've read alot but havn't got the writing power. So thanks and am gonna work to improve it.

LOOOONG first chapter. But i've gotta say that it was very good. Very well written. Maybe, i can't see the mistake because i like it so much. Anyway, i like ...

Ok, its very very good. And it made me smile too because it made me remember how i love mum. Well, you did a good job like what most people ...

Short and simple...just like the way i like it. Ok, it was really nice...a little too "teary" for me but all in all, it was good. Am giving you a ...

Ohhhhhh...why? I was totally getting into it. Reading it was so much fun for me. The only thing which made me sad was the fact that it was soooooo short. ...

Thanks...thanks...thanks. I guess i've been taking your advice very seriously. This chapter was godd but i really wanted to make it longer...but thanks for reading and reviewing...you're the best.

hmmmm...i don't know what to say. It was ok, but lacked a lot of thing. It would have been good to expand the characters a little. Discribing the surroundings would ...

Like it was said before me, the last stanza had me smiling. But to tell you the ultimate truth, it was very very good. It had everything, from rhyming to ...

ok..now i think am beginning to fall for your poems. "As love blooms, primal passions churn"...that's my favorite part. am definitely following you. And please make sure to let me ...

ohhhhhh...why oh why. i kinda got into it and begun liking it. i devoured every single word with care only for it to end too soon.

"that i powered on and strived"...now thats my OMG part. Loved it.

Now thats like music to my ear...loved it.

Hmmm, am not a poem expert but i think there's something missing. The few poems i read had some unity in the lines. And it would greatly attract more if ...

Hmmm...interesting. It wasn't very "wow" but strangely, i kept reading and liking it. Am definately keeping my eye on you.

Thanks for the review...i've actually placed this story on a hold since am trying to find a way to edit it here