Questions...

Mani read this in a real creepy voice... Any way on with the review:)
Well, the is great. No errors I can see, no problems with the poem itself. I normally don't like poems that are not written in stanzas, but, this has my attention! It's just so marvelous! I don't believe how marvelous this is!
~Dark.

I Like it a lot.
It could have rhymed a bit but it was good.
I like the topic it sounds good and exactly what people are asking themselves today but like i said if u could have rhymed it would have been superb.
I really like your use of words it sounds very poetic.
Otherwise it was very good

I like this a lot. I generally enjoy things that make me think and this piece really does. Although it was a very moving and heartfelt piece of literary work I didn't really feel much like it was a poem perhaps the beginning to a short story or novella. No matter, it's good whatever you wish to categorize it as. Keep it up!

~Erie

Hello there Planve Kat here to review for ya

Let me just first say that this was wonderful ( especially considering you posted this from a NOT Iphone ). I guess the phone made it hard to format it properly? Reguardless, usually poetry has a certain format in which you would devide it in stanzas eg.

blah blah blah
blah blah bla
bla ba blah bha
blah blah bleah

etc. and this may be one stanza and it might have a rhyme scheme of A/B/C/B or something or the stanza could be longer but I'm sure you already kenew this already.

While it was a very moving and heartfelt piece of literary work I didn't really feel much like it was a poem though it certainly had a lot of the poetic ideas, maybe re formatting and giving it some rythm or something will help with that? Or maybe I'm just over analyzing things here because I really do LOVE your idea here and feel it has a strong basis and very indepth meaning

Keep it up
~Kat