peanutgallery007

Cool! It is very nice to see your first work, so you can start grabbing reviews from some of our best critics here. (Not that I'm one of the best... ...

Wow. That's very deep. Why don't you take the key elements out of this and try to transform it into an awesome poem? I would read it! Anyway, just a ...

It looks like other critics got here first. Oh, but I do just want to say, toss the ending line, the repetition isn't needed. The line before that works just ...

Hi! Let's review this, shall we? And I never see my old friend's face, Toss the And at the beginning, for it isn't needed. for life is swift and a ...

OK, so most of this was covered. I just found some small issues... Traditions formed through struggle translate at the middle of a screaming circle Try it; "Traditions, formed through ...

I agree with mystymizer; the line cut-off need to somehow be different. I don't know what to suggest, but this poem seems a little off balance. For I’m tired of ...

Lets do this! :) What is it that makes us care? Maybe its that special person whom we have to share Remembering things like our first hug or first kiss ...

Make it longer and I will worship you. ;) Kidding. I would seriously like it a whole lot more if there was more to review though. It looks like darko ...

Awesome. Very good. :) I liked this poem a lot. I did find this though; I would take it all in, never wanting to forget a thing. There's nothing really ...

A very good piece. I like the truth in it, the way you kept it true and simple (although a little confusing at times.) I'm so glad you began the ...

I know absolutely nothing about sonnets, except all of them have a certain pattern I can detect. I'm still trying to find someone to tell me what they really are, ...

I'm going to get right to the point; I move in one direction you jerk in the same. Add a comma between "direction" and "you". Three of the men from ...

This was great! Better than a lot of fiction I have read, and I love fiction. Have you though about taking the main stuff out of this and making it ...

I agree with everyone else. What is happening? They were so exited to see Tiraine after his 5 years of absence from what seemed existence. This is an awkward sentence. ...

Hello again. I'm back and ready to review ;) They came in silence. They leave out loud. I would modify this. Cassie is correct, "leave" needs to be "left". Also, ...