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Re: Take Me Home: Chapter Four: Orientation
Hey!!!! Well done! I really enjoyed reading all chapters especially this last one which leaves me with curiosity. You really know how to hook the reader to the story! I ...
Jun 3, 2013 -
Re: blue eyes
Hey!!! This was a good effort however it would have been better if you made it more flowing . In my opinion the best verses were the third and forth. ...
Apr 28, 2013 -
Re: My Love
Hey! This is a direct simple and direct poem. Maybe if it was just a bit longer you would have managed to describe your passionate feelings to make the poem ...
Apr 28, 2013 -
Re: DEAR MUM
This is a really intense and deep poem. I like it how you began the poem bluntly and trueful as if you decided that it's no use to keep hiding ...
Apr 28, 2013 -
Re: "Roses"
WOW! This is truly good. I love all the comparisons especially the ones of the music. It is a very flowing poem which I truly enjoyed reading. The imagery is ...
Apr 28, 2013 -
Re: Lost Love
Hey! If I had to choose my favourite part from this poem I would go for,"Your brown eyes are my night sky". That is so beautiful. It shows your longing ...
Apr 28, 2013 -
Re: Dream
Hey! Great poem first of all! The first thing that caught my eye was the fact that this poem has no capital letters. Is that on purpose? In my opinion ...
Apr 28, 2013 -
Re: Boys and Me
This is a VERY ORIGINAL POEM. Ok, I must admit that I have never read such a type of poem so I'm glad you wrote it. The conversation is kind ...
Apr 28, 2013 -
Re: Dream Diary
Hey! I enjoyed reading this poem since it is truely realistic and gives the reader something to think about. I liked how you immediatley started the poem by just saying ...
Apr 28, 2013 -
Re: When Worlds Meet
Hi, this is a great poem however I feel that it needs a bit more depth. You could do this by expressing more your emotions. I love the way you ...
Apr 28, 2013 -
Re: A Note For a Date
Well, this is great. I don't know whether it is true or not about being shy to ask the girl but well, if it is I recommend to give her ...
Apr 27, 2013 -
Re: I Never Forgot You, Ever
This is a direct poem which is easily understood. The endless sense of longing emerges in the poem with the repetition of "I wish I could remember". This makes the ...
Apr 27, 2013 -
Re: Scattered mind
I really like this poem especially the first 2 verses which involved a simile. I like how you tackled your emotions using metaphors. This makes the poem more interesting and ...
Apr 27, 2013