paintingtherain97

This is good. You can sort of feel the awkwardness and discomfort and everything of the person at the operating table. The rhyming is good, but when you're rhyming you ...

This isn't bad. The picture goes nicely with the poem. I don't really understand why it wasn't in stanzas and stuff. The setup made it seem a bit like a ...

Wow. This is pretty depressing, but I guess I should have guessed that looking at the title. I'm gonna try this in list format. Pros: - The imagery is fantastic ...

I'm not gonna lie. This is pretty awesome. At first, the word awesome seemed overused and bugged me, but this was pretty funny and had a good message about being ...

Not bad. The title is a bit misleading. It makes it sound like it's gonna be another sappy breakup poem when it's actually something way better and more real. If ...

This is great. It really describes how it feels when you have writers block, like a story is building up inside of you, but it can't seem to find its ...

This is pretty good. There's strong emotion and a clear opinion in this, which inmakes people think. After all, that is what writing is about. But I do think that ...

I like this. There are some tiny nitpicky things, like in one instance where you substituded the word "were" with "where" and another where you had a run-on, although run-ons ...

This is good. It's powerful, too. Sometimes, your stanzas can be a bit lengthy, but I think if you had an older, more patient audience, this would not be a ...

This is good. I like your descriptions of everything. They were pretty J K Rowling-ish. And I like that you explained why you desire what you desire. I entered this ...

This is pretty depressing, but that isn't necessarily bad. I think to make it more interesting and to make the reader really feel it, though, you should maybe use some ...

This is really good. The rhyme scheme and rhythm work well, almost flawless. The message is pretty clear, too. I didn't see anything grammatical but you should probably try to ...

This is a great poem. There is a bit of messy grammar, in one case a word being repeated twice, but that is beside the point and quite easily fixed. ...

This is absolutely amazing! The emotions in it are so real and it perfetly summarizes the tragedies of war. It's like how we were "helping" in the Middle East. I ...

This isn't bad. I like the truthful emotion of it, although it was a bit ranty, you know? But I like the overall poem. Maybe to make it more interesting ...