orion625

This is a beautiful poem. I interpreted it to be about love, loss and longing for what once was as a grandmother's health deteriorates (maybe with dementia?). I particularly enjoyed ...

This is an interesting poem. I like that you took an unconventional approach to writing a poem about a bunny. The way you describe this bunny is something I haven't ...

Hi! I was also drawn in by the title. This poem is beautiful and the descriptions are very vivid. "lying in the cold/a canopy of dreams/and insecurities/untangles" and "i cannot ...

This is an intriguing story. I like the opening descriptions of the town and the setting. You incorporates all the senses (sounds, smells, etc.) into this piece, which adds to ...

Hi BrownMatter, I'll be reviewing your poem today. The first thing that caught my eye is the layout on the page. The use of different text alignments reminds me of ...

Hi, I haven't read the rest of your fanfic, but this seems interesting. I'm interested to learn why Alyssa is killing animals and possibly a human? One line that really ...

Hi, I came across this on the home page and it looked interesting. I tend to use a compliment sandwich when reviewing work. I'll stat of with things I like, ...

This is a good poem. The rhythm is well thought out and pleasent to read aloud. It helps hold the poem together with poem's looser overall structure. The imagery in ...

This is a good story. I like your usage of a specific incident in this characters life as a vehicle to discuss a larger theme (in this case the character ...

This is a really interesting poem. While I'm not familiar with your world building or characters, I can still relate to the poem. "He’s just like a child/Innocent and sweet/Until ...

I love the imagery and descriptions in this piece. "I want to know what love really feels like in the flesh. What does it feel like to look into orbs ...

This is a really interesting story! The idea of voices being tied to a flower and a photo is unique. You successfully build suspense with your end question: "Did she ...

The pacing of this piece is really nice! The line breaks add weight to the descriptions of Caspar leaving. This piece is also really good at conveying emotions through descriptions. ...

I love the imagery in this! Your vibrant, unique descriptions such as "grew a head of hair so full that rainfall never kissed the dirt." add depth to this piece. ...

Short Story Review: Disclaimer-I am unfamiliar with the original work this fanfiction is based off of. Instead I’m reviewing this as its own work, so I’ll be focusing on aspects ...