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*runs and hides...* I am a Nicole too, just in case you were wondering and I sometimes feel the SAME EXACT way!!! Personally...lets think...i hate my hair...i hate most of ...

Ok here goes The Real World okay...i am assuming that this is not part of your poem...i thought that it was, so pleasedo something about it... Welcome to the real ...

okay... a madding pain like no other That was a good start... a madding pain in my head With a poem this short, you shouldn't be repeating... i think that ...

first of all...this flowed like a really, really long run on sentence. I don't know why, but it did. Is it that hard to write the word "and" instead of ...

Really, I believe everyone Can have an opinion on the matter. I myself used to be idealistic, And what is called a romantic, But that was before. Amazing beginning! I ...

Return to a magnificence treasured by time To a majesty revived A beauty rebuilt Joy restored A cold and desolate bell tower Rusted bells clanging together in bitter defeat The ...

talk talk talking on the phone, sometimes I liked the repetition there, but didn't like "sometimes" I kept telling myself don’t fall don’t fall don’t fall again, your repetition ony ...

I raelly liked this... I was a bit confused in the beginning about the whole silencer thing and which gun (s) had it.... Also... you went into great detail about ...

you said I smelled like silk does silk smell? Kind of funny...Good beginning... Like others sniff coffee or baking, You don't smell baking, maybe baking cookies though. the way her ...

Do you remember when we used to play limbs intertwined one person two heads? This is more like one thing than five. It doesn't really flow and you need commas! ...

Well, I am very squeamish around the very mention of blood. This didn't freak me out, so right away, well done. The jab cross to your nose makes something give ...

slurring obsceneties and bragging about fictional escapades. change it to bragging of fictional escapades. She strode past dark strangers, whose grave voices whispered to her, disgusting things that m

my hair flying infront of my face, Maybe 'flying out in front of my face.' My breathing beating, Too many ing words. My breath beating sounds better. Envy piled onto ...

Sometimes I hate These feelings inside It feels like Something is burning I thought that this was too much. Perhaps "Sometimes I hate these burning feelings inside" and add two ...

To every story, There is a dark side of the light, Seeping walls of secrets, Unknown ends. I like this although it wouldn't be how I would start it. I ...