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Hello! First off you need punctuation for the ends of your lines because as of right now its a run on sentence. Also, some of the lines seem to be ...

Hello! First off you need punctuation for the ends of your lines because as of right now its a run on sentence. Also, some of the lines seem to be ...

Okay I gotta ask is it the bird swallow? or to actually swallow? I'm kinda unclear on that... This poem has a good concept that is easily relatable which is ...

I actually enjoyed this poem a lot. I feel like this is a real person, which I assume it is I'm just saying its so lifelike I believe it! I ...

Okay so all in all a good piece. First of your lines need punctuation at the end (commas for the first two lines, periods for the second). Also, I feel ...

I've gotta say this poem is very beautiful. You have made use of language artfully and I was able to get some great mental images. I agree with the reader ...

Hello! First off you have created an incredibly eerie poem...I like that ;) A few corrections I have are to remember your punctuation at the end of lines (for example ...

Hello! For a short piece, your writing is good. I really like the concept, and I feel if you took the time to develop it into something longer it would ...

Hello! For a short piece, your writing is good. I really like the concept, and I feel if you took the time to develop it into something longer it would ...

Okay so good job, I'm a big Hannibal Lector fan. Not in the "I love to watch flesh be devoured way"...just so we're clear. To start off I like the ...

I really loved this poem, your vocabulary is excellent and allows for brilliant mental images. I also am able to really feel how close these two people are, it makes ...

Alrighty, To start off this is not a bad piece of writing! I really like the concept behind it and you've done a terrific job giving it suspense and intrigue. ...

To start...."'coz" isn't a word, if you really love someone take the time and spring for the full "because" (It doesn't disrupt the flow of the poem). I'd also say ...

Right now this is a pretty shallow story. If you're looking for a well developed title I would suggest maybe waiting until you have more of the plot fleshed out ...