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Hey there LilaRobin! Thanks for posting this, I really enjoyed reading it! Intriguing story, interesting speaker. Onto the review! *** Have you ever seen or felt a memory that you ...

Hey there Tuckster! Loved the simplicity and relatability of this poem. We've all be where the speaker is. Onto the review! **** Your name is tattooed on my heart. Every ...

Hello Fantascifi66, Mav here to review, per your request! What an ending! I love the irony! I thought your use of imagery and comparisons was fantastic, too. :) My thoughts ...

Hello Cloudkid, I loved this. So much. Your imagery is superb and your language is gorgeous. Read this one twice! Onto the review... The gentle buzz of lightning bugs and ...

Hey There eaglefly, Nice work on this; you have some nice imagery and powerful moments in this. Here are my thoughts....... ****** I feel My feet Start to slip As ...

Hey there tinybookfarie, Nice work on this. Your style and voice are unique. The second stanza is particularly strong. A couple thoughts: 1. As the previous reviewer mentioned, 'light up' ...

I love this concept, @Traves. You convey this so well. Your tone is conversational, which makes your structure a bit easier to read. Interesting imagery... Onto the review! 'Loud memories ...

Hey @AutoPilot, This spoke to me immediately. To be perfectly frank, I haven't been on YWS in months and your piece pulled me into reviewing! (I only came to poke ...

Hello Casa, I really enjoyed this piece. Though I do wonder: are these lyrics? Or is this a poem? Onto the review! *********************************** "it feels like I've ran out of ...

Hello Aranya, Firstly, I love that this was accompanied by artwork! Did you make this yourself? It is beautiful. Onto the review!..... ********************************************* "And my fingers str

Hello Vellichor, Really enjoyed reading this one!!! My comments are below: From Roseville to Reno, In boxcars and in shacks; The brothers grew up hobo-style Along the S.P. tracks. Always ...

Hey there RoyalHighness, This was lovely to read; I really enjoyed your vocabulary, and your rhythm felt fluid. Just had a few gentle thoughts for you to consider. "Your hyacinth ...

Hello FairyLight, This poem spoke to me, as someone who has lived through an experience similar to what you paint here. It seems to me to be an abusive relationship ...

Hello speakerskat, I must confess: often longer poems here on YWS lose me after the second stanza, but this piece was so beautifully written, I actually read it a couple ...

This was powerful, speakerskat. You paint so much with so little visual imagery. Very intriguing style. Just a few gentle suggestions: "His hand clasps over mine, I might take out ...