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  • Other » General, Realistic Re: To My Future Daughter

    This is beautiful.

    Oct 11, 2012
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Behind Your Mirrors

    Hey garalynn. I definitely got "one way friendships" out of this poem. The emotion that the person in this poem is feeling, at times was overwhelming. I felt as if ...

    Oct 7, 2012
  • Poetry » General, General Re: All she ever wanted

    Hey jaimi. Short and sweet, nothing wrong with that. I thought this was kind of cute, but it was masked with sadness. The girl seems so alone! There is a ...

    Oct 7, 2012
  • Poetry » Narrative, Fantasy Re: Insect of Instinct

    Hey, averythoughtfulbeing! So, I did like this, however, in parts it seemed a bit too over-descriptive and I find myself getting caught up on words. The third verse was my ...

    Oct 7, 2012
  • Lyrics » Realistic, General Re: Skinny Cage

    Hey Razcoon! I really enjoyed this! I can almost imagine it being played on the radio (of course, I don't know the tune). As a song, these lyrics are short ...

    Oct 7, 2012
  • Poetry » Dramatic, Romantic Re: kissing your scars

    Hey Sunshine! First up, I loved it. Self-harm is a topic lots of people avoid but I respect how bold you were in the way in which you approached it. ...

    Oct 7, 2012
  • Poetry » Realistic, Other Re: When You Lose Someone

    This is a very deep poem. I really enjoyed it and found that I could almost relate to the feeling being expressed in it. You clearly have a lot of ...

    Jul 20, 2012
  • Poetry » Other, Other Re: death

    I did enjoy this and I could feel the emotion in it, however, as I am a bit of a grammar snob I can't help but find the errors distracting ...

    Jul 19, 2012
  • Poetry » Dramatic, Narrative Re: nightmares for life

    I enjoyed this so much! Although, at first, I wasn't sure what was happening but as it continued to grow and the story of sorts began to build an understanding ...

    Jun 12, 2012
  • Lyrics » Realistic, General Re: False Reflection

    This really is just... wow. I enjoyed this so much! I could feel the emotion in the words, however, I think that making the verses longer and maybe getting into ...

    Jun 10, 2012
  • Poetry » Dramatic, Narrative Re: Regret

    I really enjoyed this! But I was unsure, like aqua1213 said, whether it is poetry or prose. If this was intended on being a poem changing the layout might help ...

    Jun 10, 2012


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