madisonperkins59

I really enjoyed reading your poem. However, I do think you can be a little clearer on some of the lines you wrote. There were pieces where I was confused ...

I don't think the comma is needed after "turn around to see Dad walking down the stairs" but I'm not sure. Some of the sentences that have commas in them ...

One thing that I first saw without reading that you didn't separate it into stanzas. I've noticed that there were a couple of bold words and I personally didn't think ...

This was a very interesting piece to read! If you ask me I would say non-fiction only because I like reading about things that is real but I do read ...

I could really connect with this. I am used to leaning on other people to help me out when I am feeling low and I recently stopped doing that trying ...

Wow this poem is the best I have seen yet. You did an amazing job describing how she feels. So I wanted to say was that I loved this poem ...

I really enjoyed reading this. Overall, you did amazing getting your point across. I can connect with most of this. I have a mental illness and before I got helped ...

I loved your poem. I think this really shows how people say I'm sorry without really meaning it and expected the person to accept their apology. I really liked the ...

I really like this poem. It let people know that just because you are sad doesn't mean you have depression. I like how you described what it is to be ...

Honestly, I wanted to cry while reading this. I am currently going through the same situation but with my mom. Explaining depression to someone that does not have depression is ...

I can relate to this in so many ways right now. I like how you turned a song like the twelve days of Christmas to a poem about depression. This ...

I found this very interesting. I can relate and I am also a very emotional person for some reason. I liked how you capitalized the words BAM and SMACK to ...

This truly hit me hard. The part that I like is "You hope that I'll come home to bible beating, a trap." You should keep writing and it is also ...

I love this piece of writing. You've done a good job of using e language to portray the thoughts and feelings of the people that are suffering from their mental ...

I enjoyed reading this poem! I suggest that you not cut some of your sentences short and not put them on the next line. Like the first line when you ...