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Thank you ill try that!

Beautiful! I loved it!

Really well set of your feelings!!

This overall flow is great! I liked this

I liked how this was simple but still meant a lot. It was good!

That's good that you are taking your hard feelings and making it into a poem. Shows you are a true writer. I liked this and it showed how it came ...

Needs work! But i can see this becoming something real if you get your story out of her dad left blah blah and her mom is now alchoholic. Yeah we ...

Thank you and I agree with the disregard and i changed it!

You're feelings were expressed well in this.

I like the flow of your feelings and how "she" is used. Explain "will swallow her wholeif she is trapped." Why?

"we're a tired bunch of fools" Maybe expand on that? Very good!

Explain HOW you feel about him not noticing..."you walking down the street every single morning. I smile at you but you never notice." Maybe it could be longer? Good start!

Good ideas and written well. But I feel like your overall flow with.. "we all crave it.Finding that special person thoughis not a mission for the faint of heart." could ...

Thanks both of those help a lot i'll be sure to use more imagery!

It should be I breathe* if you want to change that. The tulips have been blooming,Pushing through the mulch of earth,Along with the other blooms of Life. < my favorite ...