Religion

Aww, this is a really nice poem. I like your simplistic rhyming and good subject matter. The thing that I like is that even though the main majority of people that get made of like this will just sit down, shut up and mope, you write about it. I do these kinds of things all the time, venting all my anger into little stories.
Very sweet, and touching. the beat is really nice!!

Thanks!

I really liked this! As an agnostic with Bhuddist principles (a little different but still essentially the same) I could really relate to it and I thought it carried a great message. People definitely need to understand that different people have different views. Great concept and great job!

Yay! It's featured again! Thanks, whoever liked this!

Aw! This isn't a featured work anymore. If anyone wants to like it.....

Thanks, Ben and July!

Hey dreamy,
I liked this poem mainly due to rhythm and fluency. Thus, it was well punctuated

It is just little things like this that could do with that extra little revision:

I cannot talk religion, their bible I can'tcannot quote.

hi Dreamy!
Really awesome poem.I don't think I can find anything wrong with it.I loved the rhyming and love the flow of the poem.I felt something while I was reading it,like I knew what you were talking about.Great job.Keep writing.
.....july.....

Wow, Dreamy! This is great stuff. I just wrote a religious poem, too, and I admire that you have as well, but in a different way. You've really brought your message to the table and delivered. Great!

Dreamy115 wrote:
It won't matter if your religion's what God calls "The Right Stuff."

Holy crap I'm athiest with Jewish principles too! I think it was nice, but there was one rhyme that was forced, it was the one ending in gloat. I liked the idea, people should be more tolerant and not biased

Thanks you so much, everyone, for making this a featured work and supporting me! I'm so happy!

Very pure thoughts, I enjoyed reading it.

I like the rhyme scheme and just the genuineness of it all. Anti-semitism is completely ignorant and I really do feel sorry that some people cannot grow up. Don't let them bring you down.

Tranquility: Thanks! I'll look over those lines.
Lydia: Thanks to you to. I'll look at my meter and figure out that line.
Icubed: Another thanks.

--Dreamy

That's good that you are taking your hard feelings and making it into a poem. Shows you are a true writer. I liked this and it showed how it came from your heart.

Hello Dreamy,

I liked this, and I actually can't see many things to tear apart with it. I would say though that this line,

Perhaps someday in the future

Hey Dreamy!

I'm your first comment! Which is lucky because I really loved your
poem....It was simple yet really meaningful. I'm sorry about
how they treat you, but just think...you managed to make an amazing
poem out of your feelings about it.
my favourite bit

They'll realize that if you love mankind,
God'll love your soul as well.

And since my savior's yet to come, over me they gloat.
Perhaps someday in the future,
they won't say I'll go to Hell.