Published January 26, 2010
my friends and i
we're a tired bunch of fools
making a ton of noise from here to there
take your shots and walk out the door
this is what we're looking for
we play our games,
let's slur our names,
we'll be the same.
and now i'm taking the blame
for crimes i never committed
and now i'm handing out compliments like candy
i guess i am your sweetest tooth
at least that's what we're taught
that’s what i learned today
i’m going for a smoke and trying not to start
you were terrified of train tracks
and all of your friends flattened pennies for fun
ran away laughing from the metal stampedes
you climbed trees and planted seeds
someday someone somewhere will know
who did what, when, where, and why
i know now that i don’t
i add insults to my injuries
and salt in my wounds
so they never heal
you said I never feel
someone told me to donate to a good cause
“even if it's just a dollar or a prayer"
what the fuck is a prayer going to do?
what the fuck are we doing here?
you like me like i like you like you said so i guess
i like you like you like me at least i think so
i think i liked you more when you were worse
i took it all
hook, line, and sucker
say i might be crazy
but i'm sure i'm not insane
you are not your wallet
you are not your stitches
you are not your house
you are not your cars
you are not your job
you are the soil from which I grow
thanks for not being you
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Very good and unique. I understand the meaning behind most of it though some bits i'm unsure about. I think some bits sound like they're just being said (more like some dialog in a story than actual song lyrics) Maybe try some more rhyming but other than that Very Good!
I like this part
Its very creative. I think you paint a lot of good pictures within the song, if that makes sense. What i mean is you create images inside my head when i read it which is excellent. Congrats"we're a tired bunch of fools" Maybe expand on that? Very good!