Published January 27, 2010
Invisible girl
Verse 1
I see you walking down the street every single morning. I smile at you but you never notice.
We could be a team we could be a star we can knock them all down cuz that’s just who we are.
Chorus
Im just invisible girl and that’s just who I am,
I see you at school with all the girls giving me evils,
And as I wave to you you don’t notice cuz im invisible girl and that’s just who I am.
Verse 2
Your at the beach with all of your friends and im on the bench thinking how happy we could be, then you notice me and smile that beautiful smile, then I realize it the girl behind me.
Chorus
Im just invisible girl and that’s just who I am,
I see you at school with all the girls giving me evils,
And as I wave to you you don’t notice cuz im invisible girl and that’s just who I am.
Verse 3
I like the way your everything I ever wanted, I like your scurffy hair, I like your blue eyes, I like your incredible laugh I like just who you are.
Chorus
Im just invisible girl and that’s just who I am,
I see you at school with all the girls giving me evils,
And as I wave to you you don’t notice cuz im invisible girl and that’s just who I am.
Verse 4
Where at the school dance and im a wall flower. I see you walk over and you say…. Do you wanna dance.
Chorus 2
Im not invisible girl and I like it this way. You look me in the eyes and say I love you you’re the prettiest thing in this entire room
Im not invisible girl
Im not invisible
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lol hey kim hows it going? im at school and im really bored so im gonna reveiw this
anyways what happened to the better version we did together? i still got a copy of that at home. c u tonight... i think. xxx
I agree with OverEasy.
A few other things besides spelling:
I think you may have meant "it's" but either way, it's still awkward and breaks the rythm.
One other thing I had a problem with: How can other girls give someone "evils." I mean, seriously! That doesn't even make sense!
That said, I liked this song and think with a little more work it could be quite touching.
See you around!
Lupis
I'd just like to point out that even in lyrics, proper spelling and grammar are a plus. Especially the spelling
you may want to go through and fix it.
yes but if it where to b longer it would b out of tune. it just wouldn't fit the tune rite.
Explain HOW you feel about him not noticing..."you walking down the street every single morning. I smile at you but you never notice." Maybe it could be longer? Good start!