laylaflame

Yeah thats all fine, wasn't sure exactly how you wanted since it was different in two places it was mentioned:)

If the transistions were instrumental, I wouldn't have heard them. Sorry. I suppose I ment the syllabol count/ rhythm was repeated. I guess all songs do do that in the ...

interesting title by the way...

How ironic.. I meant to say; "$h!t out of me" when referring to your own word jumbles and mistakes:P

Strangely, I like this. Even if it is short and just plain depressing. :) I really like the first 4 lines, but the second half isnt as.. nice? flowy? something ...

yahhh! Thankyou:D (im 17 as of last saturday btw) :P

I really like this ; short and sweet. I don't understand it, but I like it:) Welldone. -Layla Flame

I really like this!!! I'm going to have to re-read it over and over until I get everything thats in there, but thats what makes it so great! that is ...

Actually, I just re-read you peom, and now that I've gone over it a bit I can see the: long line, short line, pause, long line, short line, pause, pattern ...

awesommme:) pure genius...

Simply put; I like it. :)

thankyou for all your comments:D There very helpful:) just like to explain my choice of words: Because upon that page, you wrote your name, More beautiful than words, I mean ...

I totally agree with above, try to improve the story line (such as from my first comment), and defiantly improve your gramma:) good luck! -Layla Flame

I love how you've captured an innocent hate we all share in this clever peom:) Very well done and I loved reading it. Keep writing! -Layla Flame