kimmybee

Hello there! I am here to review :3 So I had my nitpicks with your diction and I'm going to try pointing out some. In the last sentence of the ...

LOVED IT. It was a great read. Wonderful topic and I loved how you did it in a comedic way. I'm sure minorities like myself would have been drawn here ...

One more thing, I am not sure if the title will come out in the next part you plan to write but I was wondering how exactly it fits into ...

At the end I thought, 'Please let this not be the end!' I'm glad it won't be! First, great diction. I fell from the first sentence. Your words flow so ...

This is great! Did you intend to separate the last line maybe? As in: "A cold replacement, For what we used to have." I wish it could have been longer, ...

Hey! Good read! You had some grammar errors in this that you might wish to review. For instance, instead of saying, 'Finally I see her glimpses from the corner of ...

I'm a tad bit confused...was she talking to her reflection all along- her reflection is a man? I think that was a bit confusing at the end. Great concept though. ...

This is an excellent idea for a short story but I think it needs a lot of work. Thumbs up, first of all- I'm sure I would have done a ...

I absolutely loved it! That said, I think it could be bettered with some punctuation marks, grammar and spelling checks and maybe even split some of the sentences. By splitting ...

This is so real. So precise in your description. What makes it even more so is how you went about it. How you described it. Depression is a disease. There ...

Again you do it! :D Epic! Your poems are so real!!! The image is in my head, like stuck up in the part that's they call my brain. You have ...

So I really liked this and it reminds me what makes a person a writer, it's when they write out of the expected- what everyone else leaves unwritten. You keep ...

Should you choose to continue this, you should read Brent Weeks' The Ways Of Shadow. It is really good and I couldn't help remembering it as I read about the ...

This is my second read and review on your work and I think you are a really good and promising writer. I notice though that the same thing happens where ...

'Without time there would be no pain No killing the innocent in order to gain No need to get an unwarranted blame To lose oneself for the price of fame.... ...