THIS IS SUCH A CUTE POEM/SONG! I love it though it would help knowing how the tune goes. It's something that I imagine you'd probably had lots of fun writing too!
Loved the repetition of 'I've lost all my friends to facebook' too, it gives an air of desperation (in a funny way). Loved the reference to the 'nerd from Harvard' too xD
The line 'though without this precious facebook I feel like an @$$ hole' sounds a little awkward there though..I think you were probably trying to be sarcastic with the word 'precious' but it isn't really working for me, maybe it's just me.
Also, what does 'go get lit' mean? Did you mean 'go get it'? Sorry, I've no idea here :p but other than this I loved the ending!
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