jessiethought

Yet again, great job. This is a short chapter, but I don't mind that at all. We really, really see how cold and proud Asenath has become in this chapter, ...

Hello! I am back to review your second chapter (I'm trying to work my way through your novel to be of the most help to you. But it might take ...

Hey, great job here writing about Cyrano's feelings and struggle. The rhyme in this poem is pretty good. For a little while it confused me, until I saw the pattern. ...

Hey, this is really good story. Great job! I only notice a few things that could be improved here. First of all, the verb tenses throughout the story are a ...

Nice. I like what you've done here. The Shakespeare allusions and rose imagery really works in this poem. You said to be gentle--and I don't have very many suggestions, anyway, ...

Hey, great work here! Missing summer and not wanting it to end is a common theme for pretty much all of us on YWS right now! I only have a ...

Okay, so this is pretty good. Nice work! For the most part, the rhyme is good. (Most rhyming poems these days are either cliche or horribly rhymed, but I dind't ...

This poem is very good, full of powerful emotion and powerful imagery. Now that I read your response to Vivian, I understand your subject more. (I support Israel, but the ...

Excellent poem! Your lack of punctuation is perfect--I think punctuation would distract from the language and meaning of this poem. I only have two suggestions. she would ignore earthly callings ...

Wow. This poem is beautiful, with lovely language, excellent metaphors, and clear, evocative imagery. In fact, this reminds me of the poetry of one of my favorite poets, Ted Kooser. ...

The flow and emotion of this poem is excellent. Great imagery throughout! The voice of your narrator is coming through crystal clear, and, although some reviewers have said that the ...

Whew. Definitely a heavy poem. Emotionally gripping. This poem made me catch my breath. I only have a few suggestions for this poem; it's very good. Your grammar and spelling ...

Good poem! It definitely gives a lot of astute imagery for "excruciating pain!" You wrote this for English? Your English teacher's probably glad to find a good poem among the ...

Wow. Just... wow. Thank you for this wonderful story... full of pain and sadness and hope mixed. Those are the best kinds of stories. Your POV fits the story--this story ...

Hello! Your first two lines are absolutely lovely. The metaphor is simple and understated, with clear but evocative language, and the idea of "movements aligned" is excellent. As a girl, ...