Small-town twilight

What can I say? This poem gave me a new appreciation for the streetlight outside my bedroom window. A thing I treat with such disregard will henceforth awake new hope in me. Hope for a world filled with light and whose citizens see things the way you do. Keep writing and sharing. God bless!

I really like the imagery used her. The figurative language is really good. I love how relatable the whole thing is, because I think we all know what it's like to be stuck in a small town. It has such a fantastic set-up. The ending is a little weak, and I'm not sure if I understand it. I think you should extend it out a little more. What else does the town have to share? Or maybe just more of a description. It ends so abruptly that it's hard to make a connection.

Wow. This poem is beautiful, with lovely language, excellent metaphors, and clear, evocative imagery. In fact, this reminds me of the poetry of one of my favorite poets, Ted Kooser. The reason it reminds me so much of it is your voice, and tone, and the subject of the poem. I have very little nitpicking for you.

My first nitpick is merely that you capitalize "twilight" in the title, or leave the S in "Small-town" lowercase. My second nitpick is that your fourth line sticks out awkwardly to me--in length and in the way it sounds. The length isn't really a big problem. But how the line sounds to me, the flow of the language, makes me stop for a second and make a face. Maybe it's just that I don't like the parentheses around "that close at 8 in the evening"? I'd recommend deleting the parentheses, using some other form of punctuation, or changing the phrase so that it makes more sense for it to be in parentheses. I understand why you used parentheses around the phrase (your intent is pretty clear), but the phrase itself sounds strange in parentheses. Reading aloud, one usually pauses before parentheses or inflects the words inside differently than the rest of the sentence, but the sentence here would flow more naturally without that change in flow. I would also recommend spelling out 8, but I think that's a matter of personal taste in this poem. Above all, just consider a line break somewhere in that fourth line.

Here are a few suggestions (just suggestions, just examples of the kind of thing I'm talking about):

glowing by the windows /
of small grocery stores that close at 8 in the evening,

glowing by the windows of small grocery stores /
(which close at 8 in the evening),

lighting up the front porches,
the bumpy main road, the alleys,
the dumpsters, the vacant corners,
and other worthless nooks and crannies.

Okay. Well I need to start my review at your title. It should all be capitalized. Small-Town Twilight. Every word in your title should be capitalized unless it's a pronoun or article. For example, if you use "and" or "the" in your title, it should be lowercase. Also for a title, the first letter is ALWAYS capitalized, no matter what part of speech the word is.

Alrighty then. I know that some authors find it annoying or petty when I correct grammar, spelling or punctuation. So forgive me. You can skip this part if you want. You don't need a comma after every line. It's kinda distracting and takes away from the beauty of your poem.

Those hundred-watt light-bulbs,
those incandescent stars of the small-town twilight,
hanging from utility poles,
glowing by the windows of small grocery stores (that close at 8 in the evening),
lighting up the front porches,
the alleys, the bumpy main road,
the dumpsters, the vacant corners,
and other worthless nooks and crannies.

glowing by the windows of small grocery stores (that close at 8 in the evening),

They will bring some warm orange
to your small town blues,
and if you stare at them long enough,
they will give you some of their hopes