jakobwrites

This was good, especially for your first. Thank you, thank you, THANK YOU for not using 200 metaphors. Being a shy person by nature, this is accurate and brings up ...

I love that you didn't rely on sadness to create a beautiful piece. The imagery wasn't too wordy, but it was good. I could see it in my mind, more ...

This was probably the best poem I've ever read on this website, or any other website. You have such talent! The words and paragraphs flow together and, honestly, I felt ...

The beginning felt like a pickup of something else? I do like the fact that you used correct grammar and punctuation where needed. The story made me happy, although it ...

To start off, good for you, trying something new! Of course, since you're not really familiar, the wording is a little wonky in some spots. I'm sure every other review ...

I like your consistency in capitalization, and relate to this poem immensely, having been in long distance relationships as well. The only complaint from me is the punctuation. A lot ...

I won't prod you on your metaphors and how you describe things, because poetry is a form of art and art can mean anything to anyone. How you interpret your ...

Of course, there are gramatical slip-ups, like in most poetry, but I love this poem so much. The metaphors aren't overdone, the wording is just right, and the overall feeling ...

I LOVE THIS! It's not too long, but you use every single line to your advantage. I could almost see and hear the actions you were describing! the ending tied ...

Sticking to the theme is an important part of poetry, even in free verse. It started with complaints about girls who enjoy other things (stereotypical 'bitchy' girls) And turned into ...

I loved this. The only advice would be to make your verses a little longer. Not all of them, but some could have been blended and the rhyme would have ...