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"This brain is so new It's hard to control." Wonderful couplet. :) OK, so your poem is stemming from suffering, and gets really cathartic at points. That's good, and you ...

The title, like someone else said, is very nice, and is what drew me to your poem. I feel like you really struck a chord with this poem. The statements ...

This is nice. I didn't get anything deep from it, but the format is very lyrical and I hope you write some music for this. It could benefit from some ...

This was interesting to read and follow. The freestyle form worked well with the pace and highlighted certain thoughts well. I have no grammatical nitpicks. I do wish that you ...

Welcome to the site! This is a nice poem on the subject matter. I noticed you are missing spaces after periods, simple mistakes, simple fixes. I liked how you admired ...

"Why do we chronically go forward; when all we face is contempt." That line needs a question mark. Biggest error I could find. Which is good. :) The poem itself ...

First, give it a title. Untitled poems are so trite. Second, excellent opening stanza! The comma after "is" in the first line is such a powerful pause and really sets ...

I forget my age, sometimes- I can feel it drifting from me, as if my whole life is not crucified on the T of a one, What is the T ...

I'm impressed with your short story! At first I thought the past story was a bit overly sensational, but it provided a good contrast with the archaeologists. Both stories had ...

EEEEEEEEK!!!! I think you have made a common, but tragic mistake with your poem. There is hardly any punctuation! Now, to be fair, you COULD have done this for effect. ...

The spaces after before the end-line punctuation are annoying, distracting, and inappropriate. Besides that, this is a good poem for being 14. I particularly liked the personification of your words, ...

Having verbally mocked many Christians in my life, this was a little hard to read. Parts were silly, without actually making me laugh, parts were odd, and made me want ...

Hello there, Kiicoh! Interesting poem! The first stanza is a great descriptive introduction. My favorite stanza, however, would have to be the fourth one, for its inherent flow and beautiful ...

This is a really cool poem! I love the references and intense motion of the words and thoughts. I'm going to assume that some of the more awkward phrasing of ...

Sorry for your loss. Is life ever really that bad that it needs to be taken? Is life ever really too much that it can not go on? These questions ...