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I loved this chapter and was persuaded to keep on reading since it is rich with detail and information. I love the way that you switched the attention to different ...

This poem sent chills down my spine, I loved the line 'the flaws and cracks'. I can imagine a beautiful statue, tall and proud breaking down. Your rhyming structure was ...

This is amazing writing, the way that you have conducted it, really makes it seem like it is indeed a book that you would buy in a shop. It reminds ...

I love the imagery in this poem, I can just imagine colour filling the room and your mind where it once was black and grey. It's a beautiful representation of ...

This is a very descriptive chapter and, like the reviewer stated below, flows easily and nicely. Additionally, the topic and subject within the chapter was significant, and you tied it ...

I actually really enjoyed this poetry and the bittersweet kind of representation you were going for there. This is well thought out and composed, and your rhyming structure was great. ...

I loved this writing, it has a mystical air about it. I haven't read your other chapters, but I enjoyed this one and though it doesn't have tremendous amount of ...

You have made good references in your story- the people and the wife and husband. How did Cortez become famous? Could you describe what was different about him. What distinguishes ...

Sorry, didn't mean that comment down below, I meant to write a review. I love your rhyming structure in this, it's very effective and heartfelt and also the repetition that ...

This is such beautiful poetry. I love the line 'because once the dam breaks, an ocean of memories will flood in its place.' Could you possibly make the end rhyme? ...

Your grammar and arranging of the sentences has very much improved, using more sophisticated styles and writing variations such as dashes and an effective use of commas. “I can but ...

This is a really cool poem, somewhat humorous but in a way illustrates the longing and desperation that accompanies being in love. My favourite lines were 'I see you in ...

This was a very engaging chapter. It kind got to me about her spark being gone because of the GCSEs. I know that that isn't what the story was about, ...

This is a nice way to end the chapter, with the moral of not giving up hope. When you said that Marie danced for the first time and that school ...

This is a sweet chapter, and resembles how kind-hearted Marie is. Could you describe what scholarship that Marley had won? Would it be an English scholarship, grammer scholarship? Additionally, did ...