Hey there! Plume here, with a review!! I'm a little rusty at reviewing poetry, so take all of my feedback with a grain of salt.
I really enjoyed reading this poem! I think it's a very nice representation of being in love with someone, or at least feeling attracted to them.
I think that the repetition of the word "mind" is very lovely. I think it really enforces that it's not a "true" relationship, and that it exists mostly in the narrator's head. The last line helps hit this point home, with the "nobody will ever know." I think it makes the poem super bittersweet, because the narrator obviously really cares about the subject, but also either can't have or doesn't have the subject yet. Anyways. I thought that was really beautiful.
One thing I wondered about was the repetition of the line "like fingerprints on my chest." I think that to be solidified as repetition, you need to have it at least three times. Right now, it kind of read as a sort of simile you just decided to use twice, which somewhat degraded the poem and made the reader feel like it was actually repetitive in an accidental rather than a purposeful and poetic way. I think it's a really nice simile though, so I definitely think you should leave it in, but I just think maybe you should reiterate the repetition somewhat to really drive it home.
Overall: I really enjoyed this poem! I thought it was well-worded and relatable. Nice job!! I hope to read more from you in the future.
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