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Hey there Aaraju! Thanks for sharing your poem! I second myjaspercat on all of the grammar related things, first and foremost. One particular thing that I noticed while reading this ...

Hey there Inaayat! Happy review day! Getting right into it, I got pretty confused when reading this piece. I agree with the other 3 reviewers regarding how this shouldn't be ...

Hi InfiniteRectangles! Thanks for sharing your poem and happy review day! First of all, the good things! I really thought you captured the frantic, confused tone of the narrator. I ...

Hi EmPanda15! Happy review day! I enjoy the message that you are conveying in the poem. Life can feel very hard, and sometimes we do feel as though we are ...

Hey midnightdreary! Thanks for sharing the poem! I can definitely say that this poem is true. As a kid, you really don't care what other people think. Life is so ...

Hey there silverlady99! Welcome back to YWS! So, after through the poem once, I felt the need to read it again. It wasn't connecting for me, so I thought maybe ...

Hey there screamingsloth! Great job on the poem! I really liked being able to visualize everything as it unfolded. I felt that it was fast paced, but for the topic ...

Hey DreamerBidi! Congrats on your first work published to YWS! The first thing that caught my attention about the poem was the fact that the commas as well as line ...

Hi Juleza! Welcome to YWS! Congrats on your first work! Doing a first read of this, I noticed something was a bit off-kilter. Upon further examination, I realized that you ...

Hey there AsherisAnon! Thanks for sharing your work on YWS! Like whatcha, I agree that it is a bit awkward to switch from talking Abe to talking to him. Another ...

Hey there Edelweiss! Thanks for sharing your work on YWS! The thing that most stood out to me in this piece was the emotion. I could feel the hints of ...

Hey there Dracula! Sorry this has remained in the Green Room for so long. I got to read apt. 1 of your story, and from what I see, this kind ...

Hi ThisisLegacy! Happy review day! I'm assuming what you meant by your author's note was to not comment on the subject matter? I'll take it that way. Anyway....onto the review. ...

Hey there LeutnantSchweinehund! Happy review day! I've got to say, this story tripped me up on the first read through. I even had to read the first paragraph 3 times ...

Hi Lightsong! Happy review day! I really enjoyed the concept of this poem. I always find it interesting hearing about what everyone imagines the apocalypse to be like. I really ...