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Thanks Smeagol. :) Honestly, I didn't know the desk-tapping thing was a real technique, I was just thinking of ways and it popped into my head---it was an on-the-spot kind ...

:) Thanks

"Oh" is there for the sole purpose of place holding---to keep the flow.

no prob. :)

'Lies'. should be 'lies.' Punctuation goes inside quotation marks.

I purposefully did it. I was showing how chaos and order mix in my mind.

Thank you

"I ask people a lot if they think we're meant to be. I know we are, but I still ask." "are we in love" is a stand-alone question

There was supposed to be period there. Also, I have no idea what you were saying at the end. It although agrees with the fourth line, but disagrees with a ...

It's a true story...

Like strobes

Its flashing light

It's his thoughts

:)

Th way I did it w so it appeared as though structure fell apart in my life and in the poem. think about that4