fruit4you

Fruit4you here to review! Okay. The first thing I am going to talk about is grammar. Yes, poems have grammar. The first word of each line should be capitalized. It ...

Fruit4you here to review!!! So first off you need to indent your paragraphs, and make them shorter. When you end an idea and start a new one that's when you ...

Hello! Fruit4you here to write a review! I love it. It has a great amount of detail, and I love the plot and hope to see more. However you use ...

Fruit4you here! I love where the story is going, but your writing is the slightest bit mundane. That can be fixed with better vocabulary and different ways to write sentences ...

Fruit4you here! Hello! Lovely, but sad. I know bar is a British term but it kind of throws me off the way you use it. I feel like "but" is ...

Hello, fruit4you here! Ok, so, I really like the sweet and simple style of your poem. Morbid poems aren't really my thing, but besides my taste in poetry I really ...

Hello, fruit4you here! Ok now onto the review, It had really great imagery. I did think that the poem's rhythm was a little bit choppy. Maybe you meant to do ...

It is a good poem. It tells me how you feel, which makes, to me, a good poem. It is dark. It is very dark, but we all have our ...

I really like this. I can't give much of a review, being that your poem is so short. AHHHH but I love it. I LOVE IT ALL! It is simple, ...

I do like it a lot. I do, however, feel that it is stocky. The diction is beautiful, but when I read it I can't find a rhythm. "The end ...

Awww! This is really good. I can picture all the little fairies working hard for winter. "We all have thought That when winter comes It is the frost and snow ...

I really really liked this! And at "pregnant my tummy" I think it should be "impregnate" But other than that the poem flows very smoothly. I love "a man arrives ...

The imagery is AMAZING! There isn't really anything I can find to fix it at all. Bravo :) I'm a big fan of last lines and I love yours it ...

Crap dude I really like this. It is very relatable. I also like the fact that it is sad, but it's also not over done with melodramatic-ness (I don't know ...

I liked it, but there can be improvements with flow. I like the rhyming, and the repetition. It seems like you are a very empathetic person, from what I gathered ...