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Foxtail13, hello! Nice to see you! Period inside the quotation marks, if you please. "“Hi”." "It’s to keep them safe, to keep Ultra away from them”." "“There’s these people who ...

Jessiethought, welcome to Young Writers Society! Since you say "a few", "bird" should be "birds", 'cause it's plural. And "calls" should be "call". Unless you want it your way. "A ...

HiImAndy, hello, and welcome to Young Writers Society! I am wisegirl22, and I'm here to review! The only thing I saw was that "bee hive" is actually one word. Take ...

Thegirlwhowrites, we meet again. *giggles* I think I'll get on with my little nitpicks. First... NEVER WRITE ABOUT FANDOMS AGAIN IF YOU DO NOT INCLUDE PERCY JACKSON. I can't trust ...

Hello, Segreto. Wise couldn't resist a little reviewing, so she clicked on this! You need a comma after "Sir". "Sir your wish shall be granted." Period at the end, Segreto. ...

Soyvil, it is a wonderful pleasure. Nice to see you! Spacing. It is very common, so don't worry, but it is dreaded. "...would be covered in diamonds,making the world seem ...

Foxtail13, it's a pleasure to meet you. As you may know, I am wisegirl22, age eight, and I am here to review your chapter. The title. The grand capitalization. Capitalize ...

Hello, BellaRoma, nice to meet you! I am wisegirl22, and I am here to review. Obviously. :D What is the thing with the lack of punctuation? And no commas after ...

Hello, sinningotaku, welcome to this monster of a site-Young Writers Society! Let me know your questions and wonders! A few little nitpicks in this sentence. 1) This isn't a complete ...

Hello, girlwiththelaptop, hey! Welcome to Young Writers Society, if you need help, just let me know! How did you get your first review star if you've only done five reviews? ...

Hey, niteowl, nice to see you! Cute avatar, by the way. In the second chorus, did you mean to change it? I think you did, but it doesn't make sense. ...

Noelle, you friendie! Hi again! The only thing I noticed was this: you make this sound like a big achievement. You obviously want it to give the opposite feeling, right? ...

Jared, hello! I see you are kind of new, well, not anymore! :) This essay was awesome, but you misspelled "formula". "But grammar is just as varied as whatever the ...

Emjayc, hello! I haven't seen your other work, maybe I'll review that one too. The first thing I saw in this chapter was the period and the letter after it. ...

Defyinggravity01, heya! Not new, are ya'? :D Is your pic from Wicked? Somewhere into the book, I saw an "its" that was supposed to be "it's". I couldn't copy and ...