empressoftheuniverse

It felt a little repetitive. Yes, it painted a beautiful picture of yearning in the reader but it was essentially the same image, over and over. She wants winter--now, she's ...

I hate to disagree with the poetry god above me but.. I kind of like that. And by poetry gods I don't mean in caustic or sarcastic sense but truly ...

I also really enjoyed this piece. I wish I could write but I cant define the feelings inside roaming in my mind This part has a different rhyme scheme than ...

I agree with Mighty Mistress Snoink. I would describe it as telling, not showing. You're giving us words and thoughts, not evoking emotions and images to summon thoughts of our ...

This is a really great piece. I don't like how sometimes you rhymed with "Yep, that's what they will be" and sometimes you didn't. I also don't understand the need ...

Okay, I liked this piece. The emotion, the way its presented was pretty good. There are some things amiss with the rhythm, however. And it's because you're using a lot ...

I really like this poem, caged heart. It has to be my favorite of the ones that I've read. I shall always remember. I think this would be better as ...

as real as a dream of a thing I have done, just a figment. This line feels a little superfluous. I'm rolling along into the beginning, enjoying the sights, smells ...

I'd bless the fool who'd call it grace. I'd curse myself should I attempt a mend. No, some loss is needed. Some loss is wanted. All loss becomes emptiness. Blasphemy ...

Hello there, I like this poem. As previous people mentioned it flows nicely and rhymes well. I would say nix the exclamation point at the end. Also, though I know ...

I would say no elipses, in the poem or the title. It just looks odd, to me. That was a cute piece of poetry; I did enjoy it. THe rhyming ...

I just now realized that your profile picture is a book. This whole time I thought it was a flower. :roll: Anyways... Taught to learn, love, work - Taught to ...

What have you done to my beautiful world? What has happened to the rising sun? Ok, this was the only stanza where the first line rhymes with the last. My ...

Helloy Zenjoy, I liked this poem more than the last one from you, thoough I liked them both. and time flies when you're having fun and time stops for no ...

I loved it. What's the name of the song? Because I want to hear it :smt001 It reminds me of, I don't know, a twisted mash-up of alice in wonderland ...