Published December 30, 2009
I was going to my classes,
After a very long interval.
Because of a fracture in my leg.
And the interval itself had been a blur.
As the time to go to the classes drew closer,
My heart began to quicken its pace
And the thoughts in my mind began to race.
“Oh, my dear, what happened?
How did it happen?
Are you all right now?
These all questions my friends would ask.
To speak out the answers would be quite a task.
My stomach began to tighten and grumble.
My mouth became dry,
My body with anxiousness and tension began to tremble.
And there was cold sweat all over my face.
To bring back some confidence, in vain did I try.
I wish I could stop time,
But time and tide wait for none.
And with all the trembling body and the racy heart.
I tried in vain to find some calm in spite of the cloud of apprehension
Covering my mind.
I have a fracture due to which i could not go to my classes. When i finally went to the classes, this is what i felt. Please give me some reviews. 
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Okay, I liked this piece. The emotion, the way its presented was pretty good. There are some things amiss with the rhythm, however. And it's because you're using a lot of passive voice.
Okay, not all of that was passive voice. But it gave your piece a passive tone. Take my advice or not, but there is your poem.
Your rhyming scheme was also a little a-wire but I think it works.
Great job and keep writing,
The Universe
A good idea on the whole for a poem, I like it. Just with a poem its a expression of feeling, not an excuse to write another random sentence to make it rhyme. E.g:
Feel free to mix it up a little! Just because other people rhyme doesn't mean you have to! x
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Hi there,
I hate to be a downer, but I really don't see the big deal. There wasn't much wrong with the poem itself, but I have to say, not every experience needs to be written into a poem. Know what I mean?