Hey Caged Heart! Welcome to YWS (since I am pretty sure I haven't welcomed you yet)!
Your poem was a little odd! At first it was sweet, and then it turned really jealous, like the narrator thought that her heart was going to be broken any minute and at the end, it's clear that the guy will leave and... yeah. It's a bit odd!
I don't know... I would probably pick the happy scenario and make it a full love poem or the bitter scenario and make him break her heart completely. Right now, it's a bit confusing and strange as to what your ultimate point is! And yeah... you did explain it, but... well... that just makes the conflict seem trivial, if that makes sense. It looks like she's just setting herself up for heartbreak again, and that's pretty depressing.
Anyway, thanks for posting! Hope to see you on YWS!
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