I also really enjoyed this piece.
july4ruby wrote:I wish I could write
but I cant define
the feelings inside
roaming in my mind
This part has a different rhyme scheme than the rest of your poem, and its my favorite part. Which doesn't mean anything except... it's my favorite part.
Never fond on rhyming couplets, but I enjoyed this poem in spite of that. Just think about this ^ structure when you go to write another piece, pretty please. For me.
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Sorry if that was more my blatant opinion than a review.
I'll make it up to you on your next poem.
the universe
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