emalily

This is so sad! Another old write. I have no name I am but a ghost Fading in and out of shadows Going with the wind Letting it carry me ...

cute. I think you should add another verse (or whatever its called in poetry) at the start, describing the clouds before they had to burst because I think the first ...

Hey! my eyes want to cry I would just say "I want to cry" ... eyes are just the things that tears come out of, they don't have a mind ...

Wow, I really like it. I especially like the line I was so young I didn’t know that Some things do not return. and I like the way you repeat ...

First, I'm just going to correct your spelling etc in pink Other comments in blue I can't talk. I can't breath e . Unless you 're near. Near me. I ...

I like it :) The only thing that annoyed me was And every dog, it's way. because of the saying "every dog has its day" and i feel like that ...

I like it. It reminds me of a song I have written. I think this poem is darker than what it seems on the surface. Did you think about what ...

I like the idea of the song, but I think you could make it better. I don't like the line Now you’re six feet in the ground/ because it's too ...

I did understand that this song was about sex, so I don't think you need to worry about that except I think the line about the arrows is unclear though, ...

Firstly I would like to suggest putting this in a different format ie poem as it is quite hard to read as it is Secondly I would like to say ...

I am buried as you cry Y ou think I hated you , but it was a lie I always loved you and you never knew Before I d ied ...

Hi, I am your biggest fan and I am here to review your song :) Bought her love, her trust and her heart I do not think you should say ...

I agree with Maddy except for these bits: couldn't take no more (because I hate double negatives) They'd snicker I think laughed works just as well and laughing seems more... ...

I actually like the original more than the revised version. Well some of it anyway, particularly the last line. Do you think you could maybe join them together to make ...

This is a pretty cute poem and I reckon it would work well as a song. Just one thing it should be " you're all on your own" not "your" ...