Published October 16, 2010
I am buried as you cry
You think I hated you, but it was a lie
I always loved you and you never knew
Before I died I wanted to tell you
But this is what came to my mind
You never loved me, Just desperate
And lonely but now I see the truth
and wish i could have seen it sooner
But now as I look down on you
I wish I could have told you but
it's too late
I tore your heart out and threw it away
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I have tried to fix your spelling mistakes etc in red
I'm a bit confused by this poem and I'm not really sure what it's about so I can't really make any comments about how you could improve it because I'm sure you know what you are trying to communicate.
Good luck,
Emalily
It's interesting- YOu had a lot of simple spelling and grammar mistakes though-you might want to reread it and fix those.