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Hello There...... I love this so much!! It makes me want to read more. I too am a fan off writing something that like hangs the readers on to the ...

Hello There.......... I love that the poem?......gets right to the point. However it doesn't really look like a poem......more like a paragraph. Also the poem is all over the place. ...

Hello There.... The first stanza could use a little adjusting......you should add a comma at the end of the line and at the end of the second line I would ...

Hello There..... Almost done!!! Part three of my review!!! To start off......those spaces again. Either you are excited that you thought of such a great story and you wanted to ...

Hello There...... Okay this is part two of my review for this chapter.........Let's get started. :P I love how it started off. His thoughts about the class he was just ...

Hello There........... This is my part one of my review.......the other parts are on your other chapters. I like the story you are telling here. It's good and the first ...

Hello There........ I was reading the description of this piece and your right! lol It did seem as though it had started off as a diary entry, right? :P It ...

Hello There........ The poem is wonderful! It shows the true passion that you have for trains and the luck it has brought you. Also I loved the way that you ...

Hello There....... The poem is very great! Niteowl made some good points on how to make the poems better, just some punctuation insertions every here and there. Also I would ...

Hello There....... First off I would like to say that I love your profile animation!! HA Secondly the poem is a little edgy and rough. However it is good at ...

Hello There........ I absolutely loved the poem!! I loved how it pertains to my life, it is like you just wrote this poem about me. :) MINOR issues though, so ...

Hello There..... I like the poem but there is some issues with it. So I am here to help!! :/ I am pretty sure that you are aware of your ...

Hello There........ I love the poem. Nothing was certainly wrong with it at all. I love the rhyme scheme and everything! The only thing I was a little confused about ...

Hello There........ First off LOVED the poem. It was dark and well written. Secondly, it was not very descriptive. For example, the last line in the fourth stanza could have ...

Hello there.... Awesome job on the poem. I enjoyed how the lines were short but worded greatly. I do not see anything really wrong with this poem. There are no ...