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  • Poetry » General, General Re: What's Changed?

    Hey there! clogs here to review! You have some really powerful imagery here. Your word choice does a great job at getting the emotion across to the readers, so I ...

    Jul 22, 2016
  • Poetry » Realistic, Dramatic Re: Tears? Cries? DUH! plz not in public.

    Hello again! clogs here to review! I'm not entirely sure why this is in "humor". Maybe I'm just a curmudgeonly old coot, but nothing really struck me as particularly humorous. ...

    Jul 21, 2016
  • Poetry » Realistic, Culture Re: Why?

    Hey there! clogs here to review! I think the first thing I'm going to comment on is the formatting. This could benefit from being split into stanzas. The YWS publisher ...

    Jul 20, 2016
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Love & Death

    Hey, RadiantDemigod! XD clogs here to review! This poem has some really interesting ideas, and it explores them quite well. I like that it was comparing love and death rather ...

    Jun 20, 2016
  • Poetry » Spiritual, Fantasy Re: All I Am Now

    Hello again! clogs here for another review! I like the way this poem builds. You have it set up so that the reader wants to keep on reading- if you ...

    Jun 19, 2016
  • Poetry » Realistic, Dramatic Re: I Remember . . .

    Hey, Charlotte! clogs here to review! I think the main thing holding this poem back is the rhyming. Rhyming is a great poetic device and I have nothing against it, ...

    Jun 18, 2016
  • Poetry » General, General Re: Beautiful

    Hey there, and welcome to YWS! clogs here to review! Not really sure how to start this, so I guess I'll just jump right in: The marvelous stars their endless ...

    Jun 7, 2016
  • Article / Essay » Health, Realistic Re: LGBT and Society

    Now that I've finally made my way to a computer: I'm not gonna lie. As a gay person, I am incredibly upset by this work. It doesn't matter that "it ...

    Jun 1, 2016
  • Poetry » Romantic, Romantic Re: Prologue

    Hey there! clogs here to review in this closing stretch of Review Day! Ok, I have 20 minutes to review this in order to make it count for team Potter, ...

    May 29, 2016
  • Short Story » Realistic, General Re: Becca

    okkkkkkkkk here to actually review I think that what makes this story so sad is that the cat is so powerless. It's clear that she desperately wants to do something ...

    May 29, 2016
  • Poetry » Narrative, Teen Fiction Re: Trapped

    Hey there, Stardust, and welcome to YWS! clogs here for a review. I think the biggest thing holding this poem back is the rhyming. Not only is it really inconsistent, ...

    May 25, 2016
  • Poetry » Romantic, Dramatic Re: "Five Reasons Why our Breakup was Good"

    Hey there! clogs here to review! Oooh, this is nice! A few suggestions: First, some formatting tips: I feel like this would be better organized if you put space between ...

    May 24, 2016
  • Other » General, General Re: Why Cure Humanity When The Remedies Numb The Brain? Or, Salvation is A Killing Joke

    Ah, you just summed up everything that I find troublesome about Christianity. I'm going to review this under the assumption that this poem is referring to Christianity, so feel free ...

    May 22, 2016
  • Poetry » Realistic, Humor Re: Messenger

    Hey, guineapiggirl! clogs here to rescue your poem from the Green Room! Eeeee, such a nice poem. I'm almost not sure where to start reviewing. I love the way that ...

    May 22, 2016
  • Poetry » General, General Re: I remember

    Hey there, and welcome to YWS! clogs here to review! I think this poem's greatest strength is its imagery. The second-third lines of each stanza are undoubtedly the strongest, because ...

    May 22, 2016


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