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Re: What's Changed?
Hey there! clogs here to review! You have some really powerful imagery here. Your word choice does a great job at getting the emotion across to the readers, so I ...
Jul 22, 2016 -
Re: Tears? Cries? DUH! plz not in public.
Hello again! clogs here to review! I'm not entirely sure why this is in "humor". Maybe I'm just a curmudgeonly old coot, but nothing really struck me as particularly humorous. ...
Jul 21, 2016 -
Re: Why?
Hey there! clogs here to review! I think the first thing I'm going to comment on is the formatting. This could benefit from being split into stanzas. The YWS publisher ...
Jul 20, 2016 -
Re: Love & Death
Hey, RadiantDemigod! XD clogs here to review! This poem has some really interesting ideas, and it explores them quite well. I like that it was comparing love and death rather ...
Jun 20, 2016 -
Re: All I Am Now
Hello again! clogs here for another review! I like the way this poem builds. You have it set up so that the reader wants to keep on reading- if you ...
Jun 19, 2016 -
Re: I Remember . . .
Hey, Charlotte! clogs here to review! I think the main thing holding this poem back is the rhyming. Rhyming is a great poetic device and I have nothing against it, ...
Jun 18, 2016 -
Re: Beautiful
Hey there, and welcome to YWS! clogs here to review! Not really sure how to start this, so I guess I'll just jump right in: The marvelous stars their endless ...
Jun 7, 2016 -
Re: LGBT and Society
Now that I've finally made my way to a computer: I'm not gonna lie. As a gay person, I am incredibly upset by this work. It doesn't matter that "it ...
Jun 1, 2016 -
Re: Prologue
Hey there! clogs here to review in this closing stretch of Review Day! Ok, I have 20 minutes to review this in order to make it count for team Potter, ...
May 29, 2016 -
Re: Becca
okkkkkkkkk here to actually review I think that what makes this story so sad is that the cat is so powerless. It's clear that she desperately wants to do something ...
May 29, 2016 -
Re: Trapped
Hey there, Stardust, and welcome to YWS! clogs here for a review. I think the biggest thing holding this poem back is the rhyming. Not only is it really inconsistent, ...
May 25, 2016 -
Re: "Five Reasons Why our Breakup was Good"
Hey there! clogs here to review! Oooh, this is nice! A few suggestions: First, some formatting tips: I feel like this would be better organized if you put space between ...
May 24, 2016 -
Re: Why Cure Humanity When The Remedies Numb The Brain? Or, Salvation is A Killing Joke
Ah, you just summed up everything that I find troublesome about Christianity. I'm going to review this under the assumption that this poem is referring to Christianity, so feel free ...
May 22, 2016 -
Re: Messenger
Hey, guineapiggirl! clogs here to rescue your poem from the Green Room! Eeeee, such a nice poem. I'm almost not sure where to start reviewing. I love the way that ...
May 22, 2016 -
Re: I remember
Hey there, and welcome to YWS! clogs here to review! I think this poem's greatest strength is its imagery. The second-third lines of each stanza are undoubtedly the strongest, because ...
May 22, 2016
