I love this poem purely for the genuine emotions you're writing with. Your use of metaphors to illustrate your point is marvelous. "But after that day, the apples have never been so sour." I really like this line, as I feel it gives intense imagery which the reader can easily relate to. My favorite line was, "Spreading your cold grey ashes under the thin layer of earth surrounding your favorite white roses." The details and dark imagery this line conjures up were something special. Keep writing, you're doing a swell job!
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