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Hello again, Sapphire! I like the idea of this poem, but it could use work. Let's start with the first line. As silent as an ant So, as the previous ...

Ooh. Interesting poem. Where to start? The premise seems a bit cliche, the speaker's love interest falling for the vanity-driven popular girl. However, your metaphor for it, with love being ...

Hello, there! Here to review! Birkhoff did a pretty thorough job of pointing out all the grammatical errors, so I'm going to focus on the content. For a prologue, this ...

Wow! Just... wow. This is a great, great, great, GREAT poem! The opening line is so enticing. Your use of metaphors is so beautiful. And the imagery... wow. Just wow. ...

Hello there! There aren't many technical errors to point out that haven't already been pointed out by megsug, but I still have a few things to say :) First of ...

Wow, your poem is very powerful! A genuine insight on suicide and depression, it make me think. A little grammatical nitpick, the start of every line doesn't have to be ...

Wow! I must admit, you had me worried for a little bit, comparing something that a lot of people find enjoyable with something that most people don't, but you pulled ...

Oh, yes, lack of wi-fi is a very serious problem. :) Your poems are so fun to read. I notice that you have a very similar rhyme to your poem ...

Your poem is very sweet and adorable. I feel that it definitely expresses the hope and the fear of telling someone you like them. It got a little sappy at ...

Wow, very inspiring. Your imagery is fantastic, and I love your metaphors. My favorite line was, "Mosaics are made from broken pieces, but they're still works of art and so ...

How's it going, Raven? Nice poem you've got going here. Believe me, I know the feeling of elation that you described in this all too well, and I think that ...

Heehee, I giggled. :) This is true, though, as people see disadvantages/disabilities as pretty much anything that the general public isn't affected with. The odd one out is picked on, ...

Nice to read a poem on here that isn't dark, or foreboding, or that can be interpreted multiple ways. Not that I have a problem with poems like that, it's ...

Wow, powerful writing! The emotions in your poem are so real and raw! I felt terrible for the narrator. I like how you tied everything in with the lips as ...

This could totally be a real song, if someone would write music to go with it. I like that the lyrics were slightly vague, not so vague that you have ...